Descriptive Writing

In Literacy we are focussing on writing a narrative using descriptive language. We are building our vocabulary and using examples from great authors as models for effective character descriptions.

Miss Trunchbull

Today we were inspired by Roald Dahl and his description of Miss ‘Trunchbull’ in the story of ‘Matilda.”

We are writing our own narratives so here is a sample of the descriptive language that we are using.


A sweet young girl named Bec, lived in a small cottage with her parents, her naughty brother Tom and her cheeky sister Carmen. Bec had blonde hair and crystal blue eyes. She was the youngest in the family, aged only eight. Bec had a dream, a wild dream, to search in the windy dark forest that no one ever dared to enter.


Jake was very poor but an extraordinary traveller who was seeking the thrill of discovering gold. His patched and daggy jacket was his only possession. He was searching for gold to help to keep his family alive. His thin and scrawny arms were so weak that he could barely hold the heavy pickaxe. He could only mine for gold using small tools which didn’t really help him much. His long dangly legs were not much good inside the mine however they were useful when jumping over obstacles.


“Tom and Ben were great friends and even better they were actually twins. They loved surfing and dreamt about being the best surfers in the world. Tom and Ben also loved to watch TV. They enjoyed being crazy with their friends. Ben’s favourite sports were surfing and soccer. Tom’s were football and surfing. Tom was very tall with short brown hair. Tom was extremely muscular, however Ben on the other hand was very skinny and short. Ben had long black hair and a great sense of humour.”

7 thoughts on “Descriptive Writing

  1. Roald Dahl is an amazing author and his character description makes his characters come alive. You could almost draw his characters from his description of them. You selected a great model to support your own writing and your writing reflects your appreciation. You have challenged yourself and created some great descriptions. Well done.

  2. Wonderful writing! Descriptive writing makes stories so much more interesting to read! It helps create an image in your mind of the message the writer is trying to convey. Keep up the fantastic work.

  3. I Love Roald Dahl’s work, you feel like you are really immersed in his writing, with his descriptive language giving you a vibrant picture of everything that is happening. Seniors you have used some admirable descriptive language in your inventive pieces above. Keep up the great work.
    Mrs Bellesini

  4. Hello

    I’m Alessandra from Grade 2 at Holy Rosary. Your descriptions really describe the characters in the story.

    This is the beginning of my story called “The Flying Pig”:

    “Once upon a time there lived two twins. Their names were Molly and Poppy. They both had blonde curly hair and brown eyes. They lived in the city. They were identical twins. They both liked reading and writing. They also liked to play ball games outdoors.”

    This is how I described the pig in the story:

    “The pig had white fluffy wings and scaly skin.”

    From Alessandra

  5. Hi Allessandra,
    Thanks for your lovely comment on our blog. You are a very descriptive writer also. Have you read any Roald Dahl Books? Who is your favorite author?
    Thanks for visiting our blog and keep up the wonderful writing,
    Mrs Verona Gridley

  6. Hello,
    I have read a Roald Dahl book. It is called ‘Charlie and the Chocolate Factory.’ I think lots of people would know the story.

    My teacher, Edel told us about her Roald Dahl collection: When Edel was little she had a Roald Dahl collection. One day her mum gave away her whole Roald Dahl collection to the neighbours!


  7. Hello
    your blog is great I didn’t no Roald Dahl books are called’Charlie and the chocalate Factory’

    That cat is a bit fuuny.

    From Dawet

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